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13 November 2007 @ 11:32 am
Week #1 - Lies  
Title: Casualty
Rating: G
Pairings/Characters: Zuko/Jin
Warnings: Alternate Universe. No Season 3 spoilers. Not a happy fic.
Word Count: 293

Cross-posted to rosehiptea.

Zuko is sweeping up in the woodworking shop when the girl comes in, smiling at him and rushing to take his hand in hers. He looks at her, slightly confused.

"I was looking all over for you. I heard they took you away and I was so worried, but I guess you just found a new job after all. Is your uncle working here too?"

Zuko closes his eyes for a moment, then shakes his head. "I... I don’t have an uncle. I'm in the city alone."

"What do you mean? I’m talking about that nice old man who called you his nephew." The girl backs away, starting to look angry, but then her face softens. "Oh, I understand. They still have him, and you have to keep it a secret. I heard they took you both away, and someone was shouting about—" she changes her voice to a whisper – "firebenders."

"I’m sorry, but I really don’t know what you’re talking about," he replies.

"Of course. I’ll stop now. Someone might overhear, and I don’t want to get you in any more trouble."

But the blank look in his eyes persists no matter how long she keeps staring.

"Do you even remember me?" she finally asks, reluctantly.


"My name is Jin..." she begins, but she already knows it’s too late.

"Did you want something? A wood carving?" he asks, in a gentle voice that is still his even if the words are not.

"No, I don’t," she replies sadly. "Can I just ask you one thing though, before I leave?"

He nods.

"I never knew, and I always wondered. Did you get that scar in battle?"

This answer is one he does know. "There is no war in Ba Sing Se."
Current Mood: tiredtired
Current Music: Dead Can Dance: Mesmerism
ohsoxalive: katara bloodbending angstohsoxalive on November 13th, 2007 07:43 pm (UTC)
Oh, wow. Good gravy, the ending is just so subtle and amazing, I love it. And I'm not even a fan of the pairing. It was still so wonderful. The Dai Li. *shudders*

Great job.
TeaRoses: Irohrosehiptea on November 13th, 2007 07:47 pm (UTC)
Thank you so much! It didn't even start out as a fic for the pairing, but then I thought "Who would remember Zuko after all?" I'm really glad you liked it!
adel_x_ade on November 13th, 2007 10:51 pm (UTC)
I...I...I don't know what to say. The idea of this is just so...so SUPERB. I love it, I really do. And the ending, my word, it was very eerie but very well-thought out.

The Dai Lee is so creepy on so many levels.

Wonderful job!
TeaRoses: Lisa by plantboyrosehiptea on November 13th, 2007 11:05 pm (UTC)
Thank you so much! I loved the episodes in Ba Sing Se, and I suppose the Dai Lee are really the biggest liars of all. I'm really glad you enjoyed it.
Nikko: gemmaheystella on November 14th, 2007 02:08 am (UTC)
Great job! Can't say I've read much on this pairing, but this was certainly a great introduction. The Dai Li need to back off like whoa. They're creepy. -_-
TeaRoses: Apparosehiptea on November 14th, 2007 05:36 am (UTC)
Thanks very much! I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I think you're right, too: people messing with your mind is one of the scariest things.
Lady Paynes Grey: paire-2quirkysmuse on November 14th, 2007 04:29 pm (UTC)
Ooh, lovely interaction. I love the voice in your writing though, very subtle yet still evoking strong emotions. Nice job.
TeaRoses: Irohrosehiptea on November 14th, 2007 05:11 pm (UTC)
Thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed it. I wanted to be as subtle as I could and I'm glad it worked.
Sue: Avatar - S3 Katara 'princess'jyusan on November 19th, 2007 10:32 pm (UTC)
I admit, I'm a lazy bastard and only read the winning fic, but jeeeeeeeeeeez, this was amazing. Like, freakily. wow.
TeaRoses: Irohrosehiptea on November 19th, 2007 11:22 pm (UTC)
Holy ___, I won? XD

Thank you! I'm really glad you enjoyed the ficlet. I enjoyed writing it and reading all the great fics people wrote.
Good grief, it's a running gag: crazy shit (Avatar)lady_ganesh on November 21st, 2007 09:29 pm (UTC)
Oh, that's awesome.
TeaRoses: Roku -- totally friendsrosehiptea on November 22nd, 2007 01:34 am (UTC)
Why thank you!
Anne-Elisaetrangere on January 26th, 2008 05:16 pm (UTC)
chillingly awesome!
TeaRoses: Zuko -- Breakfast Clubrosehiptea on January 26th, 2008 05:17 pm (UTC)
Thanks so much! I really enjoyed writing that.